pooff.. been away from my blog again 😦
Shouldnt say hectic weekend but yes enjoying and chilling out indeed 🙂
so here’s me back with yet another poem,.. this one’s a sad one though..
I loved the pic and thats wat inspired this poem..
I sit beneath crying clouds
That weep with me, alone
Crimson tears that scream aloud
Rain chills me to the bone
Lost in my own reverie
Waiting for tides to turn
Life seems to be dreary
Solace is all I yearn
.
Days become nights
Only hope lingers
Yet not a tuppence of respite
Faith slipping through fingers
Loneliness grows over
Mind absolutely weary
Agony is all that hovers
Both, clouds & me teary..
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I hope you guys liked the poem..
Do lemme know your thoughts…
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The words of the poem and image work together very well…one can feel the loneliness and deep sadness of the poem.
Martin,
i admire the zeal with which u always comment on my posts 🙂
trust me its a great motivating factor for me…
Beautiful. Very apt with the pic used. specially the last line “Both, clouds & me teary..”
Just one thing that I felt a little out of place…
the first 3 lines are in past tense (sat, wept, screamed)… while the rest of the poem is in present tense. I kind of liked the flow more in the present tense. :p Feels like it’s happening right now… like a video I’m watching… u know…
What do u say?
wwooowww..thanks Kadz for pointing out :O
mere dimmaag mein toh ye baat aayich nai :O
agli baar se naa will keep in mind..
infact will try to work on this one too 😀
Woah! It reads PERRRRFECTTTTT now! 😀
yo yo kadz 😀
thanks for confirming and pointing out 😀
nice one.. 🙂 it’s so like me when I’m sooo down.. keep it up..and yah, keep blogging!!! 🙂
thank you dear 🙂
glad to knw you like it and can relate to it 😀
I sit beneath crying clouds
That weep with me, alone
I am impressed with the first two lines. Whhooo… too much of emotions packed in these two lines.. nice poem… keep writing !!!
oh thanks a lot prem 🙂
m glad you liked it 😀
beautiful!
First 2 lines and last 2 lines pakka! it was like drinking raw rum!!
Nacchunu iruku!
yo yo pras 😀
thanksss 😀
beautiful picture and the words complimented it to the core. i like the rainy pictures.it always has lot to tell.
thank you Nithin 🙂
yes indeed i too love rainy pics a lot 😀
esp wen they are more or less monochromatic 😀
The title and lines evoke sadness and great depth of emotion. Can seem at times overwhelming awaiting the tides to turn. Beautiful poem.
thank you dear Adam 🙂
i guess we have all been thru such times.. waiting for the tides to turn
very stunning piece…
Glad to see you shine and share with so many memes…
thank you soo much Ji..
its all thanks to your continuous motivation and encouragement 🙂
http://jinglepoetry.blogspot.com/2010/10/poetry-potluck-natures-elements-air.html
Greetings!
I sincerely invite you to join us for a Monday Poetry Potluck party, bring in 1 to 3 poem treats to share via the link on the top! You could use an old poem.
thank you Ji 🙂
yes indeed i am writing one and i might Tag this one too 😀
awesome to see you in…
u rock!
all thannks to your motivation Ji 😀
Such loneliness, such sadness…so emotional throughout. A beautiful poem, and a beautiful picture accompanying. They complement and flow from one another splendidly.
thank you chris 🙂
Simply said and picturised a very sad song… in th elements of nature… liked it.
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Beautiful and touching 🙂 Love the title and your words, wonderfully written =)
Such sadness and despair. You really evoked such strong emotions. Nice job.
Hi Meghana, I like your blog.
The poem is very good, and has a lot of unspoken emotions hidden between the lines. Excellent!!
Regds, Punam
You painted it perfectly meghna. its just too beautiful. very lovely.