~::~ Eventide Rendezvous ~::~


~::~ Eventide Rendezvous ~::~

Setting sun, twilight purple sky

Popping stars twinkling diamond studs

Heathery bed, velvet rose buds

Intimacy sets, fervent high

Tangled fingers, stupor lingers

Pervasive frantic kisses ply

Throes of sanity, passion floods

Setting sun, twilight purple sky

 

Setting sun, twilight purple sky

Euphoria rising in blood

We lay entwined upon cold mud

Up roaring furor souls defy

Drizzling rain alleviates pain

As it pours; this eve of July

Utterly spent, exhaustion floods

Setting sun, twilight purple sky

~::~::~::~

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Form – Octain High /Double Octain

Rhyme Scheme – Abb/a(c-c)a/ba – abb/a(d-d)a/ba

Meter –  8 syllable each

Tagged –  One Stop Form on One Stop Poetry thanks to Luke for the new form 🙂

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22 thoughts on “~::~ Eventide Rendezvous ~::~

  1. Superb!!!! Ur romantic poetry takes me to a different world altogether with my special someone……from where I don’t want to return…:D Keep them coming….I am your biggest fan in this genre!! 🙂

  2. As Charlie says above, very romantic. Great title too. I like your twist on the cliche ‘throes of passion’ –

    Throes of sanity, passion floods

    However to get the form, you need to use the original A-refrain as the first and last lines of both (ie it appears four times – but varying it is acceptable and may feel appropriate if repetition is overbearing, particularly where there are two consecutively, end of one-beginning of other). So the rhyme-scheme needs to be as you have it, but lines 1, 8, 9 &16 are all the same refrain (varied if you like – change max four syllables of the eight; the end- word needs to be the same for sure). Refrain is indicated by a capital A (so it rhymes with the other a-lines). The way you’ve formatted it fits into the new alternative High Octain format I’ve just made official; (as two stanzas), the usual way is like this (and I’ll put the refrains in as a demo, you can alter them as you like then) –

    Setting sun, twilight purple sky
    Popping stars twinkling diamond studs
    Heathery bed, velvet rose buds

    Intimacy sets, fervent high
    Tangled fingers, stupor lingers
    Pervasive frantic kisses ply

    Throes of sanity, passion floods
    Setting sun, twilight purple sky

    Setting sun, twilight purple sky
    Euphoria rising in blood
    We lay entwined upon cold mud

    Up roaring furor souls defy
    Drizzling rain alleviates pain
    As it pours; this eve of July

    Utterly spent, exhaustion floods
    Setting sun, twilight purple sky

    >you could perhaps incorporate some of what you have in these lines as it stands and still end the line on ‘purple sky’ or something. The way you have it (two stanzas) is also perfectly acceptable as High Octain format but the refrains need addressing to make this true to the form. Easily remedied, Megz, nice piece! Cheers. Glad you’re back writing again my friend

    Luke x

  3. cyril kirian says:

    i do not understand form meter rhyme scheme and all of that…but i do understand a good poem 🙂

    this is definitely one of your better ones…i was there, is how i felt 🙂

    cheers!

  4. hmmm again difficult for the likes of me to understand such powerful words .. wish i had sat in my english lectures and listening to the teacher ..

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