Yaaayyy… Jingle’s back with the rally 🙂 and I am super excited about it as usual 😀
if you are serious about poetry and wouldnt mind dedicating a day to poetry and meet more poets and read lots of varied poetry and bask in their creativity Jingle’s Rally is where you should be 🙂
For more info check out
http://jingleyanqiu.wordpress.com/2010/06/30/thursday-poets-rally-week-24-july-1-7-2010/
And sweet that Jingle is she takes in anyone and everyone…
This time i am super-excited cos i am trying my hand at something different.. no this is not a new form of poetry but rather a complete different genre that i am trying…
so i hope you guys like it 🙂
Here it goes 😀
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~::~ Footboard traveller ~::~
People think I am a freak
Wondering what chaos I shall wreak
Seeing me they want to gag
Just cos I am dressed in rag
Shamelessly begging for alms
Cupping my blistered palms
Destitute, I have no home
Throughout the day I roam
Western, central and harbor line
But when I board people whine
I sit there staring at passing sights
Sunset, sunrise and dim street lights
Mountains, bridges, concrete jungles
Pass by, as a prayer my lip burbles
Alone I look for a place to rest and sleep
Full with crowds and fests, slowly my feet creep
Full of suspicion, characteristic dereliction
Life has been nothing but a malediction
Tirade and anger seething in every heart
Almighty resides in the fancy trinket mart
Going gets tough but seldom do I look askance
Survival is my goal, paltry is my chance
Don’t know where I started
My life seems thwarted
Don’t know where this would end
Striving for a livelihood, I defend
No I am not a propitious reveler
Rather just a footboard traveler
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I hope you liked my experimentation.. Do let me know your thoughts…!!
Thats it from Megzone for now..
Keep Smiling…!! Keep Rocking..!! Keep Blogging..!!
Cheerios..!!! 
Megzone 
oh!!!What a poem!!! Completely different Megssiee 😀 😀
I am really amazed at the way you have rhymed it 🙂
Gives a perfect picture of a nomadic life… Do keep experimenting 🙂
eehhhh….thaankkiiee ROh 😀
m glad you liked it..
this was jus an experiment i was trying.. actually train la i travel at the footboard and i wud rather call myself a footboard traveller.. thats wen this idea struck me that i can actually write abt those who really are destitutes 😀
thankiieee 😀
nice work…
aww..thanks dear 🙂
wow this is truly awesome!!! and this is just an experiment??? you’ve done well… the rhymes were so smooth and the depiction was perfect. you are an amazing poet. 🙂
aaww…thank you Bing 😀
yes this was an experiment cos i generally dont write on such serious topics and stuff 😀
i write more on love/fantasy and other bubbly stuuf 😀
in that case, you really did well! keep on writing, meg!
The character was portrayed wonderfully and that too in verse. Now, that is amazing! 🙂
heyyy sayak.. power aagaya 😉
hehehehehe 😀
anyways thanks ton for the comment dear 🙂
u have picked up the agony of a beggar superb and u have also put mumbai as a character!!!
good, the experiment works good megz!!!
i don’t know how much time will it take for me to come up with something like this!!!
keep rhyming..
keep rocking!!! 🙂
aawww….thanks Vivvy
that was sooo sweet of you… 🙂
areee you write well too dear 😛
Meghana!!
that was perfect!!
the rhyming pattern added such an addictive charm to the poem!
AND
the subject of the poem is a bit unique, and gets really impressive!
(:
thankk you shagufta 🙂
that was really sweet of you 😛
Meghana, this was wonderful!! I hail from the good ol’ beautiful Bombay myself (I still prefer calling it that), and TOTALLY get the poem…
The beggars, the street urchins, the destitute… the ones we despise, loathe and shoo away at lights… sitting in our cars, behind all that false glory, we fail to realize that they too are humans.. but rather than show them a better way to live, we choose to squander our chance at being something, and instead continue in our almost-nothingness mode…
You really have beautifully brought out the mind of the homeless wanderer via your post! EXCELLENT!
wwoooww.. Kavi where in mumbai 😀
good to see you here 😀
and yes i realised that offlate how we do not even acknowledge their presence in our world 😳
esp the kids 😦
thanks for writing in dear.. its great to know there are poets from mumbai in the rally too.. 😀
m sure it wud be great knowing you 😀
Indeed! Those little kids selling stuff at each light, fighting each other just for a morsel of food, having to act/sing/make themselves be laughed at… only for the few rupees just enough to buy them almost nothing.. very saddening
And yes, it’s very nice to see participants from Bombay!!! Yippeee!! I hail from the land of darkness …umm.. Andheri, I mean 😉
Already looking forward to reading more from you..
Hugs!!
you are No freak,
very excellent job!
😉
LOL 😆
aaww…ji you are the sweetest 😀
i am loving this … and that pic …wow!
aawwww…thank you dear 🙂
thats really very sweet of you 😀
Poems like this are filled with compassion and brings to light those we chose to pass by in life and never give a second thought —
A powerful poem and thought provoking to thinking about our brothers and sisters who are invisible and in need.
If this is a new style for you — you do it so well —keep on writing…. beautiful really.
Joanny
heyy joanny that was a lovely comment there 🙂
thank you sooo much 😀
Very nice. I like it very much. I think it’s great you left your comfort zone to write about people in need.
heyy morganna.. yaa i think you are right.. its when we come out of our comfort zone that we mostly realise our potential
Enjoyed your poem and it’s rhyme. It is nice to open the eyes of those who do not see the poor and suffering of this world. Well done. Heartspell
awww…dear heartspell that was really sweet of you 🙂
thank you for writing in dear 🙂
Very creative and mindfull…I love the feeling of this poem. Well done:)
aaww…thank you dear buttercup 😀
Meg, your work is phenomenal and you always amaze me. So many rhymes throughout this are ridiculously amazing!
aaww..Adam you are just being sweet and generous with words 🙂
meant it. love your blog 🙂
Excellent.
Its good that you are experimenting.
I think i’m gonna nominate you
aawww.. Sev that ws really sweet of you…
thank you very much 🙂
And your experiments come out very well 🙂 Very nice
hey spandhana…
welcome to megzone..thank you for your lovely comments.. i hope you keep visiting 🙂
An experiment well done! I like your portrayal of the foot traveler.
aaww…thank you dear suzi 😀
Different from your other ones. Nice 🙂
Ellyyyy…. good to see you here 🙂
thank you sooooooooooooo much 😀 😀 😀 😀 😀
m glad you liked it 😀
A very great post, indeed. I really enjoyed reading it. Great job!
heyy Inelle.. thank you very much… that was sweet of you 😀
What a rhymster you are! Nice one Megz
aawww… Ritu Di thank you very much LD
you call this experimenting? :O it was too good 🙂
aawww…thank you HARSHIKA 😀 tht was sweet of you D:
This was very heart warming. Very, very beautiful.
aawwwww…thansk trisha that was super sweet of you 😀
I like this work, a lot.
Rhyme on!
Tim Keeton
(Undead)Poet / Wizard / Teller-of-tales
heyy…thanks Tim 😀
I just stood up and then bowed to thee.
I never realized there was such talent around me. This is extraordinary.
To craft such beauty for a footboard traveler. As an Indian, I can connect with your poem and the empathy you show.
I’m proud to have read this! I’ve just become a permanent “RSS” reader of your works.
aawww…keshav you are just beeing to generous with word and too kind 🙂
im still learning the ropes of poetry.. theres is still more to experiment and work on
hey that is super fantabulous stuff.. The poem resonates with the feelings of that footboard traveller.. Thumbs up.. 🙂
aaww..thanks sush 😀
that was sweet of you 😀
loved this one! – beautiful!
heeyy… thanks Dish 😀
letting you know I am getting your poem to my file so that it appears on Promising Poets Parking Lot…
I will post text only, and with your blog name, general blog link included.
Thank you for the contribution!
🙂
aaww…thank you Ji 😀
its a pleasure 😀
Hey just stumbled across your blog and was mighty impressed, i really appreciate your writing style and I am looking to feature good writers on my blog,If you are curious maybe drop in sometime
heyyy…thanks a ton for dropping by and yes I am surely looking forward to being featured 😀
Awesome you should think of soeimhtng like that
Stay with this guys, you’re helping a lot of people.
By the looks at the length of your comments on this one, I would say that you definitely struck a chord. Storytelling at its finest.
that a marvel in itself i never expected these many comments 😀
thank you for stopping and i hope you keep visitin 😀
makes you want to be grateful for a lot of things 🙂
thank you dear chilton that was sweet of you 🙂
i hope you keep visiting :d
You managed to express a sentiment many times hard to describe, very moving. Stay inspired!!
aaww..thanks Amanda 😀
that was really sweet of you to stop by and leave a comment 😀
i hope you keep visiting 🙂
three poetry awards,
two general awards…
enjoy!
😉
aawww.. Ji you are the best 😀
thank you :d
Very well written and it is so true…..
thank you sumit
heyyyy ….. this is super awesome …i loved it…… it realizes me how lucky i am … beautiful it is .. !
u r a genius i tell you .. i wish someday i could write as good as you dp .. !
i misss taking part in the rallyy… 😦
heyyy Viddhi.. gal you write awesome poem.. the one u wrote for ur granpa touched me completely 🙂
so lemme tell u.. u are an awesome poetess urself 😀
This was a lovely description that casts the Footboard Traveler in a different light. It definitely reminds me to count my blessings and be just a little more understanding. Thank you.
heyy thank you for those lovely comments and yes this does make us count our blessings 🙂
Wow, I love the form of this poem, being written in all rhyming couplets. I am also a believer in not limiting yourself, working outside your comfort zone. I’d love to know what you think of my work, as I found this poem really inspiring. I am working on a little experiment of my own entitled “A Lingual Portrait of the Human Body In Parts”. You can check it out cactusflowerpoetry.wordpress.com
heyyy thank you dear 🙂
that was really sweet of you.. yes moving out of the comfort zone is definitely a challenge you set urself up for 🙂
and yes i am on my way to check your blog too 😀
I’m not for rhyming poems much but yours I very much enjoyed especially the subject and title- Footboard Traveler.
Thank you for the comment on my poem. Do it! Dance barefoot the next full Moon. 🙂