The Florette, created by Jan Turner, consists of two or more 4-line stanzas.
Rhyme scheme: a,a,b,a
Meter: 8,8,8,12
Fourth line requirement of internal (b) rhyme scheme, on syllable 8.
Like the outgrowing of a small flower, the forth line of each stanza is longer, and enwraps the
previous lines. Line #4 requires an internal rhyme scheme that rhymes the eighth syllable with
the end of line #3, and continues to add on four more syllables than the other lines so that the
fourth line ends rhyming with lines #1 and #2.
~::~ Doomed Destiny ~::~
Mottled rags & flaky parched skin
I am all alone, none akin
Till a dawn that brightens my sky
Tears from weary bloodshot eyes, of diamante flints
I sat there waiting until doom
My life seems lost in wintry gloom
Wonder when snow cover shall lift
Waiting alone with dreams adrift, my pain entombed
Looking past a life that’s obscure
Although future appears unsure
Hoping against hope, tide shall change
Hang on though utterly deranged, destiny lures
~::~::~::~
Picture courtesy –
http://www.markeviv.com/Sublinks/Wrapped/wrapped.html
Wow!!! u r really becoming a pro Megziee….Keep it up!!! Awesome one!!!
thanks rooomiieee 😀
Takes a good high score for its technicality!
thank you mihir 🙂
glad you liked it…
remarkable write great poet 🙂
thank you dear 🙂
I really loved the form… interesting
and tune ekdum mast se poem likh di usme 😀
atleast this one’s having hope at the end 😀 warna u r the new tragedy queen 😀
beautiful write 😀
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thaankkss raajjiii 😛
tragedy heheehhe 😛 kya karooo
tumhari sangti ka asar ho gaya
ke mera bhi poem tragic ho gaya hai 😛
never written a florette. I’ll try it sometime. great imagery. sad . love how you ended it hopeful “the tide will change”
thank you Isabel m glad you liked it 😀
images evoke an emotional ice age.
thank you Peggy 😀 ur comment in itself has a wonderful imagery 😀
Well written and thoughtful.
Iris
http://poetpost.wordpress.com
Thank you iris 😀
Hmm..i am thinking hard after i read this..
Nicely weaved!
Alcina
than you Alcina 😀
wonderfully written poem…It was nice of you to mention in detail about the technicality behind the poem……
Thank you Rashmi, do try the form 🙂
The explanation took the beauty away. I read it trying to understand the florette and lost the words, the feelings, the emotions. Just a suggestion and I hope you don’t mind, could you place the explanation at the end of the piece itself that way, one can enjoy the poem then find more about it? 🙂
Now I shall go read the poem and see what it is about. Enjoy the rally!
http://lynnaima.wordpress.com/2011/05/20/the-spirit-of-the-sand-boa/
aaww thanks Lynna, going forwards i shall add all the explanations at the end of the poem 😀
Interesting and involving the reader… Nice!
thank you Magher1 🙂
glad you liked it
Wonderful form and beautiful poem wow!
thank you so much 🙂 nice to know you liked it
wow that was really cool!
Thank you so much Luna 😀
What a lovely poem. You did a WONDERFUL job with the form.
Look forward to seeing more of your work.
Lisa
InspiredbyLisa
Thank you So much Lisa.. m glad you liked it..
Do keep visiting 🙂
What a wonderful depiction, following a destiny is difficult with so many obstructions
thank you mr blaque 🙂 following destiny is dificult so its better to go with the flow
Very nice form here, I quite enjoyed your second stanza. Beautiful write ~ Rose
Thank you Rose 🙂
glad to know you enjoyed the poem 🙂
have fun!
thanks Ji 😀
Your poem is truly beautiful and I feel that space of suspension it evokes that you’ve portrayed so colorfully!
Beautiful!!
Thank you so much Cindy 🙂
m glad you liked it..
Interesting form, I’ve never seen it before…beautifully written! 🙂
it is indeed a charming Form…do give it a try.. 😀
Wow! Very vivid and heartfelt! This is beautiful! 🙂
thank you dear.. m glad you liked it 🙂
Lovely poem.
Enjoyed reading your work.
Thankyou meiro.. m glad you enjoyed my work… Thanks for dropping by