~::~ Doomed Destiny ~::~

The Florette, created by Jan Turner, consists of two or more 4-line stanzas.

Rhyme scheme: a,a,b,a

Meter: 8,8,8,12 

Fourth line requirement of internal (b) rhyme scheme, on syllable 8.

Like the outgrowing of a small flower, the forth line of each stanza is longer, and enwraps the

previous lines. Line #4 requires an internal rhyme scheme that rhymes the eighth syllable with

the end of line #3, and continues to add on four more syllables than the other lines so that the

fourth line ends rhyming with lines #1 and #2.

~::~ Doomed Destiny ~::~

Mottled rags & flaky parched skin

I am all alone, none akin

Till a dawn that brightens my sky

Tears from weary bloodshot eyes, of diamante flints

I sat there waiting until doom

My life seems lost in wintry gloom

Wonder when snow cover shall lift

Waiting alone with dreams adrift, my pain entombed

Looking past a life that’s obscure

Although future appears unsure

Hoping against hope, tide shall change

Hang on though utterly deranged, destiny lures


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This is my entry to this week’s Poetry Rally – http://thursdaypoetsrallypoetry.blogspot.com/   

42 thoughts on “~::~ Doomed Destiny ~::~

  1. I really loved the form… interesting
    and tune ekdum mast se poem likh di usme 😀
    atleast this one’s having hope at the end 😀 warna u r the new tragedy queen 😀
    beautiful write 😀

    • eeeeeeeeeeee 😀
      thaankkss raajjiii 😛
      tragedy heheehhe 😛 kya karooo

      tumhari sangti ka asar ho gaya
      ke mera bhi poem tragic ho gaya hai 😛

  2. The explanation took the beauty away. I read it trying to understand the florette and lost the words, the feelings, the emotions. Just a suggestion and I hope you don’t mind, could you place the explanation at the end of the piece itself that way, one can enjoy the poem then find more about it? 🙂
    Now I shall go read the poem and see what it is about. Enjoy the rally!


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